Hi,
First of all, thanks for sharing your work.
Here are my comments and suggestions:
1. First picture:
- The side light is too harsh. If you want to just highligh the hair, try positioning the hair light from a higher angle. You might also want to add a cone to the hair light to concentrait the illumination on the hair only. In this case, it has made the right eye appear injured.
- Regading the puffy cheek comments, my suggestion is to use a different hair style to help to de-emphasize the cheeks. If she has long hair, try letting the hair down.
- The pose and expression looks rather tensed, especailly when compared to the rest of the photos. Maybe that's one of the first shots when the model hasn't relaxed.
2. Second picture:
- I liked this a lot. Nice angle, relaxed expression, and good lighting.
- You could have tried this shot without the hair light. The somewhat messy hair is quite distracting especially when highlighted by the hair light.
- A little more DOF would be great.
3. Third picture
- Is the eye makeup intentional to be so white/silvery? Personally I do not find the make up suitable for her. Some makeup contains ingredients that are florescent under UV, which gives a whitening effect under sunlight. However, the UV content of flash lights are so high that they normally make the person wearing the makeup look ghostly (not refering to your model here!). I have experienced this many times for wedding shots. In this case I would prefer a lighter shade for the eye.
- The multiple light sources has created various patches of different lighting on her face. You might want to experiment with a single light large source with maybe a reflector to fill in slightly on the shadows. I also prefer single catchlight in the eyes.
- Her dress need some ironing.
- Also, try another hair-style or face angle to de-emphasize the cheeks.
4. Forth picture
- I like this picture also, though I like the second one better.
- Again, a little more DOF would be great.
Nice job! I wished I could have the opportunity to do studio shots nowadays. Please keep sharing your work here.
Thanks!
Roy