Just a few words
Your lighting look impressive, but from the pictures, besides what they said about the theme that don't match, you probably has poor understanding of studio lighting that applied in outdoor photography.
Second, the retouch on the model,, the face is very plastic, it does not look natural. Is overdone.
Perhaps go back to basic and start again, is a good attempt any, we always have learning curves. The the theme to lighting.
Regards