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1. in what area is critique to be sought?
Composition, technique/method.

2. what one hopes to achieve with the piece of work?
To display movements within a stilll photo.

3. under what circumstance is the picture taken? (physical conditions/emotions)
Almost midnight, on a pedestrian overpass. Manual exposed (30 seconds, f/18, ISO 100), with Sigma 20mm f/1.8 EX DG. Taken on a tripod.

4. what the critique seeker personally thinks of the picture
I think I did very well in staying still for most part in the whole 30 seconds shutter speed.
 

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ovaltinemilo

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#2
I think this is rather nice...though I am nt sure hw sharp her face really is...it looks sharp here...anyway, I am rather distracted by the street lamps on top..also, wud prefer to shift the model more to the left, show more of the cars(streaming lights on the road...)...I think the shadow casted on the model and ground is rather nice...can utilise on that too..thus wud hope to see more shadows casting on the ground more...
 

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ettk75

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#3


1. in what area is critique to be sought?
Composition, technique/method.

2. what one hopes to achieve with the piece of work?
To display movements within a stilll photo.

3. under what circumstance is the picture taken? (physical conditions/emotions)
Almost midnight, on a pedestrian overpass. Manual exposed (30 seconds, f/18, ISO 100), with Sigma 20mm f/1.8 EX DG. Taken on a tripod.

4. what the critique seeker personally thinks of the picture
I think the model did very well in staying still for most part in the whole 30 seconds shutter speed.
Nice try for this shot.

However, if you wish to display movement within a still shot, I suggest you try long exposure with pedestrian walking infront of you. The result will be the pedestrian will not be very visible but rather showing movement against you as the still subject. Remember to use manual focus on the still subject than auto focus; this is to prevent auto focus from being tricked by the movement of the pedestrians and putting the still subject out of focus.
 

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Nice try for this shot.

However, if you wish to display movement within a still shot, I suggest you try long exposure with pedestrian walking infront of you. The result will be the pedestrian will not be very visible but rather showing movement against you as the still subject. Remember to use manual focus on the still subject than auto focus; this is to prevent auto focus from being tricked by the movement of the pedestrians and putting the still subject out of focus.
Good suggestion, but that would mean an entirely different photo. I want a portrait with the elements shown in the photo, so advices on how to improve with them will be much more helpful.
 

night86mare

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1. you need more space at the bottom.

2. like it or not, the bars are a horrible distraction. if you picture the same picture without those bars, i am sure you can see why i say this. i don't really see anyway around this though, other than a composite photograph.

3. not a fan of that heavy cyan cast. a touch less will be better.





1. in what area is critique to be sought?
Composition, technique/method.

2. what one hopes to achieve with the piece of work?
To display movements within a stilll photo.

3. under what circumstance is the picture taken? (physical conditions/emotions)
Almost midnight, on a pedestrian overpass. Manual exposed (30 seconds, f/18, ISO 100), with Sigma 20mm f/1.8 EX DG. Taken on a tripod.

4. what the critique seeker personally thinks of the picture
I think I did very well in staying still for most part in the whole 30 seconds shutter speed.
 

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sinned79

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2. like it or not, the bars are a horrible distraction. if you picture the same picture without those bars, i am sure you can see why i say this. i don't really see anyway around this though, other than a composite photograph.
i agree with you bro. the bars is indeed distracting... from the model's back to the shadows of the bar.
 

aspenx

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I feel that the bars are fine.

Maybe it can do with a little less exposure, say -0.3EV.

The WB doesn't work for me either.

As for the movement, at first glance, I only see the trail of lights in the background. Could do with bigger movements with your right hand by strumming the guitar. It also doesn't make sense that you will hold the same D chord for 30s...
 

ovaltinemilo

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As for the movement, at first glance, I only see the trail of lights in the background. Could do with bigger movements with your right hand by strumming the guitar. It also doesn't make sense that you will hold the same D chord for 30s...
I suggest to strum with the whole fore arm...btw, tt looks like an A chord...haha
 

#9
1. you need more space at the bottom.
2. "the bars are a horrible distraction"
3. "heavy cyan cast"
I agree on the part with the bars. The White Balance is a little to cool, and the cyan colour cast is present. Kudos for the setup and photographer/model for the effort, not easy being both at the same time. :)
 

#10
i don't like the way the bars cast the shadow on the model. It feels a bit distracting and keeps taking away the focus from the girl.

I would go in a bit closer to the subject.
 

#11
I think it is a great picture up there. I defintely like the bars and shadows, esp the shadow is really nice effect. Rather than distracting, it's more like "Art". However, if the model should just shift a bit left, it'd be perfect!
 

#12
It's a little too bright and cyan-ny for me.. I'll suggest using strobes + long exposure
maybe instead of you playing the guitar, just pose with it because to me, it looks like you're playing the guitar too fast
 

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