Reflection...


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Reflection:

Hiding in the corner,
Afraid to be out.
Laughters and mockings out there,
Are freaking me out.
I can see them through the reflections,
Of this big glass pane.
What I'm hoping now,
Is their disappearance...


Taken with my K550i. Some desaturation done to give a 'feeling'.
All C&C are welcome. Thanks everyone! Cheers!
 

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C & C are welcome! Thanks!!!!
 

tkbonz

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Takes me quite a while to figure out the link between the poem and the picture. Its not obvious enough. Composition wise, try putting a laid down racket in the corner of the room court... then the link will be more obvious.

Maybe can also change your angle/position. Slightly too much elements, may be a little distracting, especially the bottom right (some dark stuff...dunno how to call it).

All in all, a good effort!
 

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are you waiting for the guys to leave so u can start hitting ur balls? or u just lost a big game? i think this picture is more of a personal expression of ur emotions at the moment ( pls correct me if i am wrong ). without the text it is neither expressive nor interesting.
 

IONSOON

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nice poem u haf, but i tink the light(white patch) from the left is abit distracting, just my 2 cents
 

Rashkae

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I don't see the link between the picture and the poem. You should try to let the picture evoke a story, not create a story to try and rescue a pic.
 

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Thanks everyone for your comments!

I don't see the link between the picture and the poem. You should try to let the picture evoke a story, not create a story to try and rescue a pic.
I'm trying to write a poem to rescue my picture ;p.

PS: I secretly took this during my PE lesson in school ;p so not many things I can do to compose this picture. Sorry for that.
 

Rashkae

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Thanks everyone for your comments!


I'm trying to write a poem to rescue my picture ;p.

PS: I secretly took this during my PE lesson in school ;p so not many things I can do to compose this picture. Sorry for that.
See the picture before you take it. Don't just take 1,000 pics then try to make up a story to rescue it. Use your pictures to capture a story.
 

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it is a very good idea, just that the execution is not fantastic

like others have mentioned, too much distracting elements. moving around to obtain a much better, less cluttered composition is key to making the shot.

but no worries, you can always shelve the idea, and try it again when you have the opportunity, no? :) cheers and keep shooting, with your positive attitude, i'm sure you will improve fast :)
 

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