I like the grains and the sunlight on the left. The human subjects adds an interest point to the pic and also create a balance. Good stuff. If u could, pp away the distracting red thingy on the floor and also adjust the tilted horizon.
understand that you are using film, but the color palette here is very, very unpleasant. the yellow is sickly in tone, the blue is so intense.. surrealism is fine, but taken too far it works against you.
that said, i think the compositional idea is great.