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drama

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I recently was aquainted to this forum by a friend
He specifically mentioned the high quality of feedback in the critiique corner

I need an honest opinion on this picture



I am a newbie & compositional tips are most welcome
Thanks
 

drama

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No filters, no post processing
 

drama

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Since no one wants to have a go, I will give it a shot myself :)

The evening sky colors are nice but that is the sky
The whole effect is spoiled by the mess of leaves at the bottom corner

No the sun was way too bright to capture directly
 

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i have something to say...
the sunset colours are pretty nice... but say the leafs spoiled it. should have chosen another subject.. maybe the whole tree on a third to the left...
 

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I am not sure... But it feels bland... Mayb u would like it to be more contrasting? Emphasis on the colours of sunset doesnt realli stand out in this picture. Wat FL did u take it at? Mayb, u can include a horizon but definitely not the leave on the bottom left as drama n paul mentioned.
 

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Hi all

I recently was aquainted to this forum by a friend
He specifically mentioned the high quality of feedback in the critiique corner

I need an honest opinion on this picture



I am a newbie & compositional tips are most welcome
Thanks
This shot has no subject. nothing that tells u to look at me...

If i wanna shoot something like that, most probably, i'll either find another silouette subject on the right to match the current leaves, or i place the leaves as the centre of attraction, taking 1/2 the pic, corner to corner. with the sun as the centre. But thats my perception.

on your techniques, dunno wat cam u use, u could actually try shooting with a smaller aperture like f16, your current 1, i guess should be f2.8 or f4, y? cos when u shoot with smaller aperture, the light rays from behind the leaves will form a star shape, giving more feel to the picture.

lastly, the feel of this pic is neither here nor there, its like a holiday beach shot, but only with a few strands of coconut tree leaves *dunno simi tree, maybe palm tree or others*, then the sky... its kinda dull... i'll probably add more of the surrounding if i am a landscapist, this pic will probably be an abstract, but it fails to look abstract.
 

drama

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This shot has no subject. nothing that tells u to look at me...
It feels like a stage, you are absolutely right
That is what I was trying to figure out

Thanks for the compositional tips
I am using a canon S3is, no filters
 

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The colors are nice no doubt but like what some has mentioned, it lacks a theme or subject in your shot.

Quite frankly, as the picture is loading top down, I was attracted to the rich colors and expecting it to load further showing more parts of the leaf/tree but was disappointed when it stopped just there...
 

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The colors are nice no doubt but like what some has mentioned, it lacks a theme or subject in your shot.

Quite frankly, as the picture is loading top down, I was attracted to the rich colors and expecting it to load further showing more parts of the leaf/tree but was disappointed when it stopped just there...
actually, i find that if this shot is in a series would be cool... something like a prelude... like 1 part of a big picture... but sadly, it isn't... nice try thou...
 

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So today I tried some shots, based on what you suggested

I liked this the most




I liked this too


What say you ?
 

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1st shot is nice, but the sunset not really defined, but its a good job done afterall. cos the clouds are soothing. a minor nitpik, crop 1/16 of the top portion then 1/8 of the right. Try it, dun have to post here, u'll get what i mean.

2nd shot, the 'coconut tree leave' is blur, not due to handshake, but too near to you, its not beyond the infinity range, most likely if me, i'll remove it away from my shot. and this shot lack the base, the trees sticking out of nowhere is a distraction. this shot however, if u take portrait, with the weird looking tree silouette and the sun alone will be perfect.

3rd shot, nicely done like i've said previously, just that the sun a little too low. but u horne the skills, try again next time... this time on the leaves... make 1 of the centre of attaction.

:thumbsup: keep it up!
 

drama

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Thanks for the tips & compliments :)
I get what you mean, will give it a try
 

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Yup the composition has indeed improved. However, for #3 understand you are trying to get the whole silhouette of the tree in your composition. But if me I would rather try using a longer lens to focus your attention on the sun to get a better effect.
 

drama

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Yehosaphat:

Thanks :)
I will try what you suggested

DCA:

I tried the both the crops you suggested, thanks they both work well
 

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1st shot is nice, but the sunset not really defined, but its a good job done afterall. cos the clouds are soothing. a minor nitpik, crop 1/16 of the top portion then 1/8 of the right. Try it, dun have to post here, u'll get what i mean.

2nd shot, the 'coconut tree leave' is blur, not due to handshake, but too near to you, its not beyond the infinity range, most likely if me, i'll remove it away from my shot. and this shot lack the base, the trees sticking out of nowhere is a distraction. this shot however, if u take portrait, with the weird looking tree silouette and the sun alone will be perfect.

3rd shot, nicely done like i've said previously, just that the sun a little too low. but u horne the skills, try again next time... this time on the leaves... make 1 of the centre of attaction.

:thumbsup: keep it up!
agree with DCA abt the 2nd pict...

"this shot however, if u take portrait, with the weird looking tree silouette and the sun alone will be perfect." - DCA
 

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agree with DCA abt the 2nd pict...

"this shot however, if u take portrait, with the weird looking tree silouette and the sun alone will be perfect." - DCA
wah u quote me ar... :embrass:

anyway drama, shoot more and u will know how to see a pic and immediately know where to crop... by the time u are so used to it, u can see the crop from the viewfinder already...
 

drama

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DCA

On the crop of #2

This was the first crop I had posted on flickr
I did see that,I was trying to seeit as a series with the palm frond uncropped :)
 

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