Key areas to note for a good macro is to get the eyes sharp. So try to aim for that.
#1: you got that fairly well.
Next, you will need more DOF for macros. So the apeture you use is too shallow. Not sure what system you use, but should use a small apeture to get more DOF. This will lead to lost of light, so either use a longer shutter (use tripod) or use flash.