Here comes the critic:
Do you really need the fill light? IMHO, it takes away the mood. Without the fill light you probably get a moodier pic that is more dramatic for this kind of look.
Also, I would rather use the key light at camera right, and opt for softbox - preferably with flags like the westcott apollo or black-backed umbrella which is easier to control split. Taking it from the right side and shooting towards the left, and flagging it, and bringing it really close for a sharper fall-off, you might avoid the light pollution into the table and porcelain plate behind. Or just remove the porcelain plate first and pull the subject further away from the background if possible.
Also, you do not need 1/10 shutter, it burn in too much ambient, again, which contributes to the distracting background. I like the background items there, but also like it to stay quiet and not distracting.
Overall its a good effort and nice picture.