like previously said... illustration is still very 'flat'
if u can do a greyscale background, u can obviously do a greyscale subject... maybe u might wanna practise abit...
also, fonts are too dull, no 'impact' even with the !!! and note that not to join them together, cos like 'all!!!' too closely spaced... look unsightly...
then capitalise the 1 Alphabet after the full stop ( . ) is 'compulsory' in english... oh ya... incase that thingy look like an ass, no offense thou...