I like the concept that you are trying to portray.
Execution could have been a bit better though.
Picture is a bit too dull for me. A bit more detail would have helped, especially for the person in the background.
I would also be interested in seeing the version in colour. The red colour of Marlboro pack would have come out nicely.
i didnt want much details for the subject as i wanted the interpretation to be more open and less direct.
i shot this straight in B&W using a compact digital so unfortunately i dont have the colour version. btw, the pack of cig is marlboro lights, so no red