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1.in what area is critique to be sought?

Seeking feedback mainly on composition. Even though the bird was caged I did not want to risk scaring it off and kept a distance. Yet I wanted the subject to sufficiently occupy the frame to reveal its different textures. The tail was placed off frame as including it would have meant "shrinking" the subject. Would different framing have been a better choice?

2.what one hopes to achieve with the piece of work?

This is not an ambitious nature shot but what I hope to achieve is to show the captivating parts of the bird: colours, texture, claws, and eyes. It's a feast for the eyes.

3.under what circumstance is the picture taken? (physical conditions/emotions)
This was a shot taken at 55mm/f6.3 under daylight. It was an unplanned shot as there were other birds around and other shots taken too. This one happened to be at the right location in the right posture.

4.what the critique seeker personally thinks of the picture

I like this photo because of the captured moment when the bird looked right through the cage bars and its body was lined up in a soft diagonal across the frame. I think the cage bars added an element of interest by showcasing its claws.

 

cabbySHE

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I want to break free...that's what comes to mind.
I like the eye which is directly in between and the radiating feathers around.
 

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Guess what, I have this strange feeling that I am in the cage with the bird staring at me. Weird. haha
 

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Guess what, I have this strange feeling that I am in the cage with the bird staring at me. Weird. haha
I have the exact sentiments! Probably because in the foreground, we can see the plants, and it feels as though the bird is on the outside.

I am not a professional photographer but I think this photo feels very awkward to me. You should try standing perpendicular to the bird, the whole picture feels slanted.

Just my few cents. Continue snapping fellow CSer!
 

pokiemon

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sorry doesn't work for me. it is normal to shoot a picture of a bird behind a cage. nothing new. and i dont fancy the green bokeh. it is a weird topaz green.
 

calebk

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Even tighter? Nope, I don't think it'll work.

This image is just a normal close up of bird. It must be commended that you got so close, but compositionally and aesthetically, there is nothing that makes it super outstanding.
 

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Hi centurion_sg,

I think you score on textile and colour for this photo.

When it comes to composition, it appears too far to the top right-hand corner.
 

sidloojl

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I have the exact sentiments! Probably because in the foreground, we can see the plants, and it feels as though the bird is on the outside.

I am not a professional photographer but I think this photo feels very awkward to me. You should try standing perpendicular to the bird, the whole picture feels slanted.

Just my few cents. Continue snapping fellow CSer!
cause the bird is slanted...haha.

personally, i like the eye between the cage thing, but i find the picture weird cause i think it was too close, there must be sth to do with the composition, cause i feel as if i am standing right in front of the cage, staring at that bird, makes me a little giddy...
 

calebk

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cause the bird is slanted...haha.

personally, i like the eye between the cage thing, but i find the picture weird cause i think it was too close, there must be sth to do with the composition, cause i feel as if i am standing right in front of the cage, staring at that bird, makes me a little giddy...
I honestly don't think it's so much composition as it is the tightness of the frame. It gives the viewer (and the subject) a lack of "breathing space". Even in macro and close up work, very often, there is breathing space around the flower or insect.
 

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what is good:

in focus, eye contact from bird


what is bad:

horizontals all over the place because of horizontal perspective distortion

general messiness due to too much elements being in the frame (and this is enough to overpower everything that is good)
 

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