Ok, I don't read Korean neither Chinese, anyway, I consider photograph is a visual and internationnal art. It has to be understood what ever there can be written during post-processing on it.
Technically, I see a good photograph of a beautiful girl, maybe you should have opened top left to give more space to her eyes, maybe you should have shown her hands instead of cutting her arms in the middle (poor girl with arms but no hand). However, exposure, focus and colors are just very good and nothing to say at this level, I'm sure that camera and post-process are good.
However, what is your message in this photograph, what are you trying to say, what is the feeling I should have when I watch this photograph ? Face of the model is quite expressive, I guess there are many messages you can send with that. She's watching something (I guess an other photographer), ok, but how to play with that ?
Please tell me what you were thinking when you pressed the shutter release and what you should put in this photograph to express your mind.
I'm not into portrait but I just wondering whether a single flash was used? The hair capturing the light makes it looks very powdered and the eyes seems to lack focus as compared with the dress. I like the expression though