Reflection...

[Werty]

Reflection:

Hiding in the corner,
Afraid to be out.
Laughters and mockings out there,
Are freaking me out.
I can see them through the reflections,
Of this big glass pane.
What I'm hoping now,
Is their disappearance...

Taken with my K550i. Some desaturation done to give a 'feeling'.
All C&C are welcome. Thanks everyone! Cheers!

 

[Werty]

C & C are welcome! Thanks!!!!

 

[tkbonz]

Takes me quite a while to figure out the link between the poem and the picture. Its not obvious enough. Composition wise, try putting a laid down racket in the corner of the room court... then the link will be more obvious.

Maybe can also change your angle/position. Slightly too much elements, may be a little distracting, especially the bottom right (some dark stuff...dunno how to call it).

All in all, a good effort!

 

[BernZ]

are you waiting for the guys to leave so u can start hitting ur balls? or u just lost a big game? i think this picture is more of a personal expression of ur emotions at the moment ( pls correct me if i am wrong ). without the text it is neither expressive nor interesting.

 

[IONSOON]

nice poem u haf, but i tink the light(white patch) from the left is abit distracting, just my 2 cents

 

[Rashkae]

I don't see the link between the picture and the poem. You should try to let the picture evoke a story, not create a story to try and rescue a pic.

 

[Werty]

Thanks everyone for your comments!

I don't see the link between the picture and the poem. You should try to let the picture evoke a story, not create a story to try and rescue a pic.

I'm trying to write a poem to rescue my picture ;p.

PS: I secretly took this during my PE lesson in school ;p so not many things I can do to compose this picture. Sorry for that.

 

[Rashkae]

Thanks everyone for your comments!


I'm trying to write a poem to rescue my picture ;p.

PS: I secretly took this during my PE lesson in school ;p so not many things I can do to compose this picture. Sorry for that.

See the picture before you take it. Don't just take 1,000 pics then try to make up a story to rescue it. Use your pictures to capture a story.

 

[night86mare]

it is a very good idea, just that the execution is not fantastic

like others have mentioned, too much distracting elements. moving around to obtain a much better, less cluttered composition is key to making the shot.

but no worries, you can always shelve the idea, and try it again when you have the opportunity, no? cheers and keep shooting, with your positive attitude, i'm sure you will improve fast

 

[Werty]

Thanx people!