Imho pace feels too slow for the music and as an opening. There's also a lack of variety of shots.
My attention wandered off after seeing the first few frames (bowling) cleared. It would be nicer to include cutaways, maybe cleaning the bowling ball, or someone taping up his/her fingers or having his fingers moving in to pick up the bowling ball.
Editing wise, to pick up the pace it would be more effective to have more cuts. Even better if you can sync to the music.
If your message is to become a "pro" bowler then show a close up of a strike! Or someone with his fist pumping in the air. All these will add to the "action" feel of an opening sequence.
Good luck with the vid