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    Grandfather’s past times were hanging out with friends at the coffeeshop and dabbled in stocks. Stroke caused him to have a serious fall in bathroom, he stopped doing things he used to . He spends his time now sleeping or sitting in the living room. He may seem to be in a daze or in deep thought and emotions reflect upon his face. Sometimes he acts like a child as his mind is affected by the condition.

    The intend I would like to portray is how stroke can alter a person which in this case is my grandfather. Stroke affected his mobility and speech, which stopped him from his usual routine. How stroke has affected him mentally, the way he behaved now, the slight amnesia and hallucination he is experiencing. I hope to be able to inject some emotions into the viewers when they are looking at the photos.

    [IMG]<a href="http://tinypic.com?ref=16s8rq" target="_blank"><img src="http://i54.tinypic.com/16s8rq.jpg" border="0" alt="Image and video hosting by TinyPic"></a>[/IMG]In what area is critique to be sought?
    Since its the first time I am using a dslr to take a subject, I hope I can be critiqued in all aspect that needs to be improved on

    Under what circumstances is the picture take? (physical conditions/emotions)
    Taken to do as a work in school an to explore photography

    what the critique seeker personally thinks of the pictures.
    I like the expressions that he is giving and the attachment I have for my grandfather.

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    Your image did not show.. let me help you.

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    TS, I really feel for you. Thanks for sharing your story.

    But coming to your picture, I really do not see the emotion you are trying to show here. It looks more like a snapshot.

    I encourage you to check out the work of this photographer, who documented the final days he spent with his father. I think you can draw a lot of inspiration from there on how to tell a story and project all those emotions.

    http://www.dayswithmyfather.com/

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    Do you think by taking a close up portrait of your grandfather, there after convert it to B/W with strong contrast will be better?

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    i feel that a closer head on shoot should work better.

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    I would go up close focus on the eye and tone it to black N white.......just my $1 suggestion....
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    My few cents.

    Background is too distracting.
    Tighter Crop. - eliminates the messy bkgnd and focuses all attention to your subject. Also can give a sense of entrapment and tension to the picture.
    Go for B/W
    Increase the contrast in B/W
    Fix the exposure. Its too flat at the moment.

    For future photos, think about the direction of the light and how to use it to portray what you want to say about your grandfather.
    More areas in shadow can mean its more moody, mysterious, dark.
    Brighter and less shadows can be something more happy and clear.
    Side light can create more textures on the face and show up wrinkles, etc


    Gd luck.
    Last edited by pinholecam; 13th October 2011 at 04:05 PM.

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    b/w will look nicer...

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    Thanks everyone for the great input, i will be trying a tighter crop and BW
    Daredevil123: thanks for the link, i can see what u meant from the photos that u linked

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    This is another photo whereby my grandfather sits on the chair and staring into space, it feels that he is having a lot on his mind. His face reflects emotions, I feel a sense of worry in his facial expression as he thinks about his children or recalls the past.
    Last edited by sgping279; 15th October 2011 at 04:03 AM.

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    Daredevil123 - Great link. Brings back fond memories of the limited number of days spent with my dad when he was still around. Thanks for sharing.

    TS, sometimes a good picture takes into consideration the environment of the subject. Not necessary to close up on the subject all the time unless there is a unique area to be focused upon. I applaud your effort and I think it is a great thing to do. This will become a journal of memories with your grandpa. Continue to shoot but observe more at the same time. This might give you a better sense of what you want to capture in each frame. All the best!


    Quote Originally Posted by daredevil123 View Post
    TS, I really feel for you. Thanks for sharing your story.

    But coming to your picture, I really do not see the emotion you are trying to show here. It looks more like a snapshot.

    I encourage you to check out the work of this photographer, who documented the final days he spent with his father. I think you can draw a lot of inspiration from there on how to tell a story and project all those emotions.

    Phillip Toledano - Days with My Father

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    Quote Originally Posted by sgping279 View Post

    This is another photo whereby my grandfather sits on the chair and staring into space, it feels that he is having a lot on his mind. His face reflects emotions, I feel a sense of worry in his facial expression as he thinks about his children or recalls the past.
    this is better then your previous photo. although the photo looks a bit out of focus.

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    Quote Originally Posted by sgping279 View Post

    This is another photo whereby my grandfather sits on the chair and staring into space, it feels that he is having a lot on his mind. His face reflects emotions, I feel a sense of worry in his facial expression as he thinks about his children or recalls the past.
    Crop can be tighter still. Personally, I would crop off another 1/3 of the photo which is nothing but empty space.
    Picture is OOF. Look out for this.

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    This had improved from the earlier picture. For me, portrait shot, I'll probably go nearer still or Pinholecam pointed out.

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    Quote Originally Posted by daredevil123 View Post
    TS, I really feel for you. Thanks for sharing your story.

    But coming to your picture, I really do not see the emotion you are trying to show here. It looks more like a snapshot.

    I encourage you to check out the work of this photographer, who documented the final days he spent with his father. I think you can draw a lot of inspiration from there on how to tell a story and project all those emotions.

    Phillip Toledano - Days with My Father

    Thks senior.. I saw the website.. Every pic tells a story..

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    Hi everyone thanks for the nice comments
    Sinned79: yes, the photo is a bit out of focus, i tried to sharpen it in photoshop though.
    Pinholecam: yup, will take note of it, thanks

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    Quote Originally Posted by sgping279 View Post
    Hi everyone thanks for the nice comments
    Sinned79: yes, the photo is a bit out of focus, i tried to sharpen it in photoshop though.
    Pinholecam: yup, will take note of it, thanks
    try shoot it right in the first place. Focusing is hard to fix during PP. Take another shoot if not focus properly.

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    Hi. I am a very newbie. Half a cents worth.
    First Photo: Your exposed background distracted me. In fact the photo appears a little too bright such that the details on his face is kind of lost. Details like his wrinkles, moles, freckles... are the most beautiful on elderly faces.
    Second Photo: I think if the lines and details of the face can be captured, it would be beautiful.
    For both pictures, the eyes were not captured. Lines/Creases around the eyes brings out a lot of emotion.

    I personally love taking shots of people, but I found it very difficult (even when the person is sitting still) .... I want it candid, I want it personal.
    Keep it up! Thanks for sharing...

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    Thanks for the critique will take not of the whites and will take more shots in case of any photo are out of focus

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