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    1. In what area is critique to be sought?
    As a new DSLR user, like to shoot something creative and meaningful. Want to learn more to produce better phototgraph.

    2. What one hopes to achieve with the piece of work?
    To show the loneliness of these 2 kids.

    3. Under what circumstance is the picture taken? (physical conditions/emotions)
    I was shooting my kids at the playground and saw this 2 little girls sitting aside. Their facial expression triggered me to take the shot.

    4. What the critique seeker personally thinks of the picture
    No comment.

    Thank you.

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    Playground is suppose to be a joyous place for children, but the children appeared so sad/moody?
    I find the red pole very distracting. Composition has much room for improvement. Perhaps if you should move to the left to avoid the role pole.
    Anyway, try again next time.
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    Default Re: Playground

    Quote Originally Posted by kwttan View Post
    ...Playground is suppose to be a joyous place for children, but the children appeared so sad/moody?...
    I agree with the point mentioned above. The kids are framed to close to the left edge, there isn't enough breathing space. The image seems a little soft in terms of sharpness. Exposure could be a tad more, it looks a little underexposed to me. Don't be discouraged, shoot more and improve
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    Photo has some potential but flaws are stated below

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    The photo does not show how the girls are lonely given the tight composition.
    Underexposed
    Distracting foreground elements
    Unnecessary details in photo (see that pony?)
    Pole sticking out of girl's head
    Not sharp

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    ha ha if the kids in the image are like that.... then its like that.... there is no wrong in that.... in fact it makes for good contemplation about why they're like that even when all decked out in play gear and clothes

    the thing in the image that's bugging me is more on composition...... they seem placed a little too tightly to the left ...... if you're trying to squeeze in a critical element that cant make it into the frame on the right , I'd understand.... but the way you've executed it gives it a very unbalanced and cramped feel..... furthermore, the perspective looks like you're using a tele zoom of sorts .... no reason not to pull that zoom back wider a little to give the poor girl on the extreme left a little room to 'breathe'

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    Default Re: Playground

    Quote Originally Posted by kwttan View Post
    Playground is suppose to be a joyous place for children, but the children appeared so sad/moody?
    I find the red pole very distracting. Composition has much room for improvement. Perhaps if you should move to the left to avoid the role pole.
    Anyway, try again next time.
    Quote Originally Posted by ed9119 View Post
    ha ha if the kids in the image are like that.... then its like that.... there is no wrong in that.... in fact it makes for good contemplation about why they're like that even when all decked out in play gear and clothes

    the thing in the image that's bugging me is more on composition...... they seem placed a little too tightly to the left ...... if you're trying to squeeze in a critical element that cant make it into the frame on the right , I'd understand.... but the way you've executed it gives it a very unbalanced and cramped feel..... furthermore, the perspective looks like you're using a tele zoom of sorts .... no reason not to pull that zoom back wider a little to give the poor girl on the extreme left a little room to 'breathe'

    best of luck !

    Actually, imho this could be a shot, about unhappy childhood. I don't know about the rest, but to me, I saw a story in there. The setting is happy, supposed to be, but the kids are sulking. Why?

    Just that, perhaps TS might consider moving to the left, the red pole should not be there. Maybe moving much more to left, can place the kids with playground stuff to give it a context. Just my .02

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