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    Wink Troubled Seas




    1. in what area is critique to be sought?
    any comments at all! this is one of my best black and white shots and anything to improve it would be greatly appreciated


    2. what one hopes to achieve with the piece of work?
    to take better and more natural portraits of people. also, to fine tune my monochrome shooting.


    3. under what circumstance is the picture taken? (physical conditions/emotions)
    heavy winds from the sea, clear sky and a troubled look.


    4. what the critique seeker personally thinks of the picture
    i love this picture a lot! after all it's a picture of my sister
    Last edited by knoxknocks; 7th November 2010 at 12:43 AM.

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    I think this image is nicely composed and your sister will like it too for a long time

    There is just a little too many things in the foreground and background cluttering and fighting with her for attention.... let me correct what i just said...... there are too many lines foreground and background fighting for attention with your subject

    nice moody feel the way she's looking out
    shaddap and just shoot .... up close
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    Default Re: Troubled Seas

    +1 for Mod's comment. What do you want the viewer to be drawn to?

    Quote Originally Posted by ed9119 View Post
    I think this image is nicely composed and your sister will like it too for a long time

    There is just a little too many things in the foreground and background cluttering and fighting with her for attention.... let me correct what i just said...... there are too many lines foreground and background fighting for attention with your subject

    nice moody feel the way she's looking out

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    i..... want to be fixed on that faraway gaze...... the other stuff pulling my eye away from the subject is not really leading me anywhere although it adds a rustic mood (a little over emphasized no?) (the bench she is sittin on and the couple of wood standing upright seems sufficient enough

    just my personal take........... some might like the cluttered lines around her..... nothing wrong with that too
    Last edited by ed9119; 9th November 2010 at 10:48 PM.
    shaddap and just shoot .... up close
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    Bottom left hand corner is distracting. @.@

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    I like the 'feel' of this pic, esp in B/W. Man, I need to learn how to capture the "moment" in portraiture....
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    weird. iwas expecting water actually.

    i dunno. but i find the overall image very white. maybe the black andwhite conversion could have a better spread of whites and darks?

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    Erm...I am not a pro but similar thoughs as allenleonhart...I was expecting more water/sea. I guess the patch of area behind the subject is the sea right (not very obvious to me). Perhaps I might prefer more of the sea included with the lady staring towards the sea.

    So I might try out the landscape orientation and maybe exclude her feet since the slippers aren't that attractive (but her hands' posture is nice). Again all these are due to trying to fit your picture to your title. Maybe you can think of another title that suits your current picture better?

    Just my own opinions.

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    I love the mood. It draws you in.
    Can imagine your sister making this her Facebook profile pic. Haha.
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