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    Default Critiques and comments required!


    1. in what area is critique to be sought?
    Mood, Composition
    2. what one hopes to achieve with the piece of work?
    Bring back the kids in the playgrounds!
    3. under what circumstance is the picture taken? (physical conditions/emotions)
    Playground near my house, nobody was there when i went.
    4. what the critique seeker personally thinks of the picture
    This is in B&W to bring out a nostalgic feel(that's what i think). It shows how Singaporean children are getting less and less active outdoors.


    I'm quite new in this. Please do guide me along.

    ===Additional Info====
    Picture taken with Canon EOS 550D. EF-S18-55mm f/3.5-5.6 IS lens.
    Shutter speed is 1/640. ISO 100. f5.6.

    Cheers!
    Last edited by knoxknocks; 10th June 2010 at 12:38 AM.

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    may be better if u have a wider view and focus the swing and blur out the whole empty palyground...??

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    Default Re: Critiques and comments required!

    Not sure how the original picture goes but could try monocolour (like sepia, or a colder steely colour depending on what mood you are trying to convey) rather than B&W, or alternatively can try to desaturate and make those nostalgic colours. That is, if you are doing post-processing (which I assume you are unless you shot your pix in B&W).

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    Default Re: Critiques and comments required!

    Quote Originally Posted by zachTAY View Post
    1. in what area is critique to be sought?
    Mood, Composition
    2. what one hopes to achieve with the piece of work?
    Bring back the kids in the playgrounds!
    3. under what circumstance is the picture taken? (physical conditions/emotions)
    Playground near my house, nobody was there when i went.
    4. what the critique seeker personally thinks of the picture
    This is in B&W to bring out a nostalgic feel(that's what i think). It shows how Singaporean children are getting less and less active outdoors.


    I'm quite new in this. Please do guide me along.

    ===Additional Info====
    Picture taken with Canon EOS 550D. EF-S18-55mm f/3.5-5.6 IS lens.
    Shutter speed is 1/640. ISO 100. f5.6.

    Cheers!
    the composition looks boring, static, too many vertical lines in the frame
    plus the form of the floor causing confusion to the viewers.
    can't really identify your main subject.

    suggestion:
    set your camera on tripod, using wide angle to frame the empty playground but place the swing up close, push the empty swing and let it moves, using slow shutter speed to capture it.
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    Quote Originally Posted by catchlights View Post
    suggestion:
    set your camera on tripod, using wide angle to frame the empty playground but place the swing up close, push the empty swing and let it moves, using slow shutter speed to capture it.
    That would be quite a scary picture leh especially 7th month *kidding*

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    thanks for the C&C. I'll try to improve using the pointers provided!
    Probably going back to the playground to take a few more pictures

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    Quote Originally Posted by wildcat View Post
    That would be quite a scary picture leh especially 7th month *kidding*
    Let the ghosts have some fun with the swing, keeps them busy
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    Default Re: Critiques and comments required!

    A slightly different angle would be great to show the other swings, better if have kids on the others, and this one empty.

    Just my 2 cents.
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    The two chains on the foreground is very distracting. It doesnt add anything to the picture.
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    I doubt BW attracts kids.
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    heyy! i doubt you can bring kids back to the playground just like that... anyway, the swing seat is too centralised for my liking, and i think as a whole, it's hard to make head or tail what's going on in the photo because the shapes and lines are too cluttered. maybe before you go back, since you already know what the place is like, you could think about what you want to shoot and how you can possibly frame it before going down, that might help a little in terms of you thinking of better, more creative compositions
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