Ro-Ro starting to explore studio style lighting!
Organised hoot or TFCD?
Anyway, me nawcht master or anything cos here is much more experienced P&P shooters, but for such a set-up, I would look at a lot more directional lighting (could be hard, could be soft, all depends on what you want to achieve) to bring up the fashion aspect of the shot, or just bring up the dressing a bit.
It's a lot easier to start with a vision then map out how to do the shot, as opposed to 'go on location and see how'.
On the whole, it's a good effort.