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    Hello. I'd like to be critiqued on this shot. I wonder if the title actually fits the picture. This shot is taken underneath the Esplanade bridge.
    I am trying to bring out the contrast between the disorderly arrangement of the lights and the orderly fashion of the bridge structure. Did that contrast seem obvious at a first glance?

    Composition wise: would a tighter crop be better ?

    Thanks in advance.
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    i dont feel anything disorderly about the lights. so cant feel the "luan zhong you xu".
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    picture looks a little slanted?

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    I like it. Although the horizontal lines arent exactly disorderly cos they dont slant or "mess" up very much.

    The contrast however of the picture is nice.

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    Quote Originally Posted by timotheus View Post
    picture looks a little slanted?
    rotate your screen , should look straight then.

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    its quite unique though, for me.

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    I don't think the slanting of the lights are really that significant to point out the contrast.

    Without looking at the description, I think it resemble a star trek gateway. Haha

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    I don't know...the lights seem to be too distracting IMO.

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    May I suggest that it maybe worthwhile to think along these lines - that the 'disorder' was not intentional. The high contrast actually makes a person want to see more 'disorderliness' against the rigid concrete structure, so for me that seemed to place the tilted lights in a dilemma. My 2 cents worth (in 3rd world currency). Lovely shot by the way. I like it.

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    Thank you all for the kind critic and comments.
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    While the picture on the whole makes my head spin and eyes strain quite a bit, i agree that there is alot of contrast in this picture.

    - parallel lines at the bottom vs the slanted angles all around
    - alternating dark and light regions
    - the sharper focus at the bottom vs the blur around the top

    Actually after the initial glance, where the lights jump out at me, i find my focus drawn/escaping to the lower third of the picture where focus is sharper and the eyes generally feel more comfortable (less strained). Would be great if someone or a cat happened to be pictured at around that location too.
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    I quite like this picture. Beautiful use of lines and shadows. Bravo.
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    i dunno about this pic.. but its not interesting enuff to even put it on a wallpaper.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Doughnuts View Post
    i dunno about this pic.. but its not interesting enuff to even put it on a wallpaper.
    bro, this comment isn't very pleasant for TS and the public.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Doughnuts View Post
    i dunno about this pic.. but its not interesting enuff to even put it on a wallpaper.
    Yes once again we find insensitivity in a forum. sigh*

    Great job to the TS, i think the pic is sublime! Wish i could get shots like that man!

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    IMHO if the crest of the first arch was visible, that would frame the shot perfectly against the solid black at the bottom. Re-shoot?

    B&W tonal range is very pleasing and grain is nice.
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    i like the shot, but there isnt enough Disorder, or any obvious Order for the title to work.
    but anw, nice shot.

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    Hi all, thank you all for the comments, certainly welcome that any time. I suppose photography is a form of art and appreciation of art is subjective. Anyway I'm seeing more likes than dislikes so far
    I have problems giving titles to my shots all the time, perhaps its my poor command of English.
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