A night in Orchard

[ryan84]

First time posting in Critique corner.

Saw this moment when this lady taking her handphone to take the chirstmas tree at Takashimaya. Focusing is at her handphone screen.
I wanted to show chirstmas season is here in Singapore in this picture.
















Camera: Canon EOS 300D Digital
Exposure: 0.004 sec (1/250)
Aperture: f/1.8
Focal Length: 50 mm
ISO Speed: 800
Exposure Bias: -2/3 EV

[HTCahHTC]

hey.
not a bad shot at all.
the concept is there, the bokeh is good.
but somehow, it couldn't really distinguish that it's Christmas season, as the Christmas tree taken from the hp (i'm assuming it's a Christmas tree, can't see properly though) is way too small.
a crop may and may not work here.
cos if you crop to make the phone bigger, the lady's head might not be visible, which i think will not have make a big impact on the photo anymore.
but overall this shot is colorful.

[elmzarcega]

this shot works for me.. i love the blue bokeh.. i think cropping it in portrait orientation should give more impact and remove the negative space on the right...

[jym]

Would be nicer if the phone screen was large enough to see the tree. http://www.clubsnap.com/forums/image...lies/smile.gif

[ryan84]

ok thanks..will take note next time for this kind of shot..

Merry Christmas to everyone

[Redsun]

very nice concept
agree with the hp screen too small though
but nice idea

[Anson]

Nice Bokeh, maybe it would be abit better to do an extra cropping to focus on the handphone... just my 2 cents...

[night86mare]

do not like this shot. nice bokeh is not useful when it serves zero purpose.

if you had gone closer, so that we can see more details on the screen, and the bokeh in the background resembles that of the tree she is shooting, that might have worked. not this.

[cheguthamrin]

SUggest that since you got the idea, try again, this time with a friend to hold the cameraphone, so you can do the adjustments.
Keep shooting!

[patatahead]

for me, it would be nice if the person holding the phone is a bit clear-not soft, but this demonstrate how good your lens is. nice!

[cabbySHE]

Maybe a 85mm focal length, vertical format ,might be able to compress the perspective.

[ryan84]

thanks for the input..will get a shot again..
merry chirstmas!

[timotheus]

aye like most of the other comments, a closer view of the christmas tree would help amplify the story you're bringing across. happy christmas for anyone who's in the mood. i'm certainly not really in the festive mood not year for some odd reason. must be army.

[hannson]

OMG! Great idea and great bokeh!...

Keep shooting!

btw, was this a Cropped shot? or this is this unedited?

[ryan84]

Originally Posted by timotheus aye like most of the other comments, a closer view of the christmas tree would help amplify the story you're bringing across. happy christmas for anyone who's in the mood. i'm certainly not really in the festive mood not year for some odd reason. must be army.

Been there done that...Army is a phase of life for a Stinkarpore boiboi roh..
bo bian wan...
don't tell me u tio duty on christmas?

Originally Posted by hannson OMG! Great idea and great bokeh!... Keep shooting! btw, was this a Cropped shot? or this is this unedited?

is unedited i think is flickr resize it to became like tat

can view the unedited at my flickr at
www.flickr.com/photos/ryan84

[timotheus]

Originally Posted by ryan84 Been there done that...Army is a phase of life for a Stinkarpore boiboi roh.. bo bian wan... don't tell me u tio duty on christmas?

haha nah, i'm actually quite happy being where i am in army to be honest. dream job. i think it's just the idea of army in itself being the spoiler

[kazeeee]

i think it would be nice without the head, so u probably go closer to the phone.

[bluecanon]

hey
is a very nice pic but a bit too dark la if is brighter will be better.

[prolensdreamer]

the most important thing is you are still happy after receiving critiques from Csers.Cheers and happy shooting