A day on the Beach

Monkey King · 15th December 2008

Hi friends

This is my first critique posting. Fairly new to my DSLR, going on few months now.

This image: f 5.6, 1/640 sec
I love rickety boats.
1) I wanted to capture the boat in the setting without being too amateurish. Does the composition work for you? If not, why?
2) How are the technical aspects, exposure, colour etc?
Cheers

Monkey King · 15th December 2008

I've posted some more on the Landscape section:
http://www.clubsnap.com/forums/showt...90#post4629890

Would value your feedback for a noob!!

Octarine · 15th December 2008

Originally Posted by Monkey King

1) I wanted to capture the boat in the setting without being too amateurish. Does the composition work for you? If not, why?

What do you think, have you achieved your target? If not, why?

If you wanted to capture the boat then why is there a) another boat, b) rocks in the background, c) this rope right hand side and d) the boat nearly from front?

Monkey King · 18th December 2008

I still wanted a bit of landscape, i.e. didn't want to occupy the frame with the boat. Got some more photos I should post, different angles, larger % of frame etc.

Snooze · 18th December 2008

I think the boat on the left spoils it all and part of the boat is cropped away and the bands too. ^^Over all not bad

night86mare · 18th December 2008

exposure and color look alright.

composition is not, the boat is awkwardly cropped, with parts chopped off mercilessly. the composition is a little unbalanced, leaning too much to the left side for my liking. the angle on the boat is one of the more photogenic ones i can imagine, but the other boat to the side, and the tightness give this a very cluttered, constricted feel.

cheguthamrin · 19th December 2008

Could have done a vertical shot, a bit more to the right, so you can get the blue sky too. The floats on the right may not be necessary, make the boat the main subject. A small dose of HDR may help to bring out the boat's details.

Monkey King · 19th December 2008

Thanks for the feedback.

Giorgio · 20th December 2008

For for the one in ur #1 post.
I assume this is taken in halong bay?

Monkey King · 21st December 2008

Phi Phi island tour - Maya bay, where part of "The Beach" was shot.

I've posted some more on the Landscape section:
http://www.clubsnap.com/forums/showt...90#post4629890

Would value your feedback for a noob!!

15th December 2008	#2
Monkey King New Member Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: Jurong East Posts: 17	Re: A day on the Beach I've posted some more on the Landscape section: http://www.clubsnap.com/forums/showt...90#post4629890 Would value your feedback for a noob!! __________________ Fair Trade not Free Trade Last edited by Monkey King; 21st December 2008 at 12:35 AM.

18th December 2008	#4
Monkey King New Member Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: Jurong East Posts: 17	Re: A day on the Beach I still wanted a bit of landscape, i.e. didn't want to occupy the frame with the boat. Got some more photos I should post, different angles, larger % of frame etc. __________________ Fair Trade not Free Trade

18th December 2008	#5
Snooze Member Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 68	Re: A day on the Beach I think the boat on the left spoils it all and part of the boat is cropped away and the bands too. ^^Over all not bad

18th December 2008	#6
night86mare Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: in your mind Posts: 19,283	Re: A day on the Beach exposure and color look alright. composition is not, the boat is awkwardly cropped, with parts chopped off mercilessly. the composition is a little unbalanced, leaning too much to the left side for my liking. the angle on the boat is one of the more photogenic ones i can imagine, but the other boat to the side, and the tightness give this a very cluttered, constricted feel. __________________ Gallery \| Dreamscapes 09 Pentaxian 伪君子之所以更可憎

19th December 2008	#7
cheguthamrin Member Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: 600060 Posts: 1,267	Re: A day on the Beach Could have done a vertical shot, a bit more to the right, so you can get the blue sky too. The floats on the right may not be necessary, make the boat the main subject. A small dose of HDR may help to bring out the boat's details. __________________ Already abused my D40 and D80 for my flickr

15th December 2008	#1
Monkey King New Member Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: Jurong East Posts: 17	A day on the Beach Hi friends This is my first critique posting. Fairly new to my DSLR, going on few months now. This image: f 5.6, 1/640 sec I love rickety boats. 1) I wanted to capture the boat in the setting without being too amateurish. Does the composition work for you? If not, why? 2) How are the technical aspects, exposure, colour etc? Cheers __________________ Fair Trade not Free Trade Last edited by Monkey King; 15th December 2008 at 10:47 PM.

19th December 2008	#8
Monkey King New Member Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: Jurong East Posts: 17	Re: A day on the Beach Thanks for the feedback. __________________ Fair Trade not Free Trade

20th December 2008	#9
Giorgio Member Join Date: Sep 2008 Posts: 138	Re: A day on the Beach For for the one in ur #1 post. I assume this is taken in halong bay?

21st December 2008	#10
Monkey King New Member Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: Jurong East Posts: 17	Re: A day on the Beach Phi Phi island tour - Maya bay, where part of "The Beach" was shot. I've posted some more on the Landscape section: http://www.clubsnap.com/forums/showt...90#post4629890 Would value your feedback for a noob!! __________________ Fair Trade not Free Trade Last edited by Monkey King; 21st December 2008 at 12:35 AM.