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![]() The other day i went walking around my neighbourhood and there was this wet red mazda in a driveway, with a red umbrella behind it, and it caught my eye.. i find the fact that both the car and the umbrella are red made this photo interesting to me. ![]() Would like to seek opinions on: composition, Does the idea work? Any other way it can be improved Thks for looking ![]() |
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I'm not seeing any message from this photo.
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I am not really trying to bring across a message, more of something interesting in which the red car matches the red umbrella
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So does a pic with with no relevance and not taking as well.
TS, I see no idea within the shot, the composition is off as well. The slipper beside the umbrella is distracting. And if you hoping that this shot would be something abstract, it failed.
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Actually I do like the composition, the half framed car. The background spoiled it all. So now it doesn't work anymore.
Last edited by PyeeL; 9th December 2008 at 11:21 PM. |
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I intentionally included the umbrella as the car was wet, and it also matched the colour of the car
. PyeeL, which part of the background did not work?![]() |
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The concept is very sound, but the title doesn't match.
If there wasn't a title, and if the photo was bigger to show the raindrops even more clearly, I would've suspected that the concept of the photo was about raining. Title doesn't fit. Composition wise, I can't tell, something seems wrong here. Lighting is soft and nice (due to clouds), but I would've exposed the photo longer.
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Headshotzx would have used a small aperture to 'get-rid' of the depth of field. Thus the longer exposure.
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Ok. maybe but i had intended for the umbrella to be slightly OOF. tried it with greater DOF but was not quite the same as this
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if you tried it with greater DOF you're meaning that the umbrella was blur-er than the picture you posted?
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doesnt a greater dof mean the umbrella should be Clearer, instead of blurrer
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Actually the exceptionally white highlight on the side and front of the car is highly distractive for me, it looks far too digitally simulated. And I think everybody is right. The picture doesn't 'speak' to me at all. Bright bold colors doesn't always equates to a good picture, not even a good composition.
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Kindly explain how you GET RID of depth-of-field... thank you.
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But this was in someone's drive-way, so I guess your options were limited. I would have not focused on the red-ness. Rather, zoom in on the water droplets on the bonnet, thus making the background a blur, with the umbrella still distinguishable but blurry.
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pplneedthelord meant to close down the aperture (bigger number), so that there would be greater DOF. And with greater DOF comes a flatter image. Note that he used the inverted comma('). So I guess he didn't meant to entirely get rid of it.
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