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    Girl in the Dark

    this was taken in mind with death as a theme.
    objective of this photograph is to suggest e fact that this girl might enter through this gate but has yet to find a place to go.

    i'm generally an aspiring photographer looking to better my game!
    as a whole, could this picture be taken in a better way?
    in terms of technicality, is there any fault?
    would really love to get some criticisms!

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    I find the girl and the light too far to the left. For someone entering afterlife, she's carrying a lot of baggage. Having only one destination ahead of her, it also doesn't suggest the "yet to find a place to go" part, but it does suggest she's hesitating about going through all the way.

    I'm a little conflicted about the gate on the right - I can't decide if it adds to the photo. Also can't decide if focus should be on her (for sharper silhouette).

    Is this posed or something you happened to see?

    But I rather like it. Nice idea, nice image.

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    i apologise! i guess my explanation isn't done very well! oops!
    but i wanted to express a girl carrying baggages to her afterlife. seemingly as though she can't let go. hesitant to enter her next life as she has too many baggages.
    to me, at least, i wanted the gate to be in focus as she should be focussing on moving on and not look back!
    wanted viewers to wonder.
    wonder why is she hesitant.
    wonder why is she carrying bags.

    btw, this is posed.

    thanks for your comments! i think i would need to work on my explanation next time!

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    Quote Originally Posted by tensioninthetangent View Post
    but i wanted to express a girl carrying baggages to her afterlife. seemingly as though she can't let go. hesitant to enter her next life as she has too many baggages.
    In that case you got your point over to me 100% successfully

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    when lookin at a pic, i normally dun tink too much. cus it can be anyone's guess, and the worst is to write an essay, explaining why the pic is taken as such. a pic should explain itself.

    so, purely from a pictoral point of view, i find this a good pic.

    its dark, but the key elements are visible.

    there is light reflected off the iron gate, and the outline of the girl is clearly defined.

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    Quote Originally Posted by attap seed View Post
    when lookin at a pic, i normally dun tink too much. cus it can be anyone's guess, and the worst is to write an essay, explaining why the pic is taken as such. a pic should explain itself.

    so, purely from a pictoral point of view, i find this a good pic.

    its dark, but the key elements are visible.

    there is light reflected off the iron gate, and the outline of the girl is clearly defined.

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    Well said Couldn't agree more. It's a good photograph.
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    its a decent picture.

    but when you have death as a theme, your model or that girl in the picture looks like she's just done shopping.
    chezburgr i can haz?

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    Quote Originally Posted by psychobiologist View Post
    its a decent picture.

    but when you have death as a theme, your model or that girl in the picture looks like she's just done shopping.
    that is what i feel too.
    photography makes one sees things from all angles.

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    Love the right side of the pic,
    (the perspective of the gate, the shadows and the light running through the metal gate)

    but dislike the left side.
    (the light & the girl too contrasting & striking for my liking, lost a lot of details.)

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    Quote Originally Posted by attap seed View Post
    when lookin at a pic, i normally dun tink too much. cus it can be anyone's guess, and the worst is to write an essay, explaining why the pic is taken as such. a pic should explain itself.
    Agree with this point.

    Quote Originally Posted by iNotion View Post
    but dislike the left side.
    (the light & the girl too contrasting & striking for my liking, lost a lot of details.)
    ...and this point.


    Quote Originally Posted by lennyl View Post
    I find the girl and the light too far to the left.

    I'm a little conflicted about the gate on the right - I can't decide if it adds to the photo. Also can't decide if focus should be on her (for sharper silhouette).
    ...and this.

    A landscape would do better, but overall, I am confused with the title and the picture itself. Would appreciate you having the Thread Title as your picture title itself; cos almost everyone here is "a newbie looking for constructive crit"
    Sorry, it doesnt work for me here.
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