Where are you my love?

jkuean · 16th August 2008

Well thats the phase which immediately came to my mind when i saw this scene...
Its a candid shot after a concert.. i was backstage covering the event, then as everybody was leaving going home, my friend just stood there as everyone else is going home...
It felt for me as like shes waiting for her better half to appear, even though its getting late, almost everyone has left, if he is coming, he would have came by then.. But nonetheless, she
is still patiently waiting for him to appear...
Btw this is wad i felt the pic was to me...

Dunno wheather if my fren is already attached...

I want to ask if the compostion is okay?
And about the pp done.. how is the b/w conversion.. should i made the picture softer... like reducing the contrast.. or is it okay?
All C&c is greatly welcomed!
Thanks in advance...

Drckz · 17th August 2008

hi, jst wanna say the compostion is out, maybe try centralize the subject? you brought her out well.. the colors are ok.

tkbonz · 17th August 2008

I can't tell from the composition where the theme comes in...until i read your description. It looks messy...i don't know where is the subject initially and the background (ppl in black walking around) is rather distracting.

Things i can tell from the pic: this is a symphonic band concert...it has just ended...you used flash.

This shot is too candid and IMHO a shot that i'll try not to take. You can try taking from the back or position yourself in such a way to make your subject and the theme more obvious.

How? 1. Use depth of field to isolate your subject
2. Change your perspective...dun take from where you are
3. Or simply finding other subject...too much distractions around.

night86mare · 17th August 2008

very , very cluttered.

conversion to black and white is probably a good choice, i.e. it is marginally better than the color version. but it is still very, very cluttered.

HTCahHTC · 17th August 2008

nope, composition ain't okay to me.
the whole picture seems too messy, but the colors were brought out well.

calebk · 17th August 2008

Originally Posted by HTCahHTC

... but the colors were brought out well.

Er, right. What colours?

Did you mean tones...I don't think tonality-wise, it's very varied either. Too much contrast, but not the right kind of contrast.

ahbian · 17th August 2008

Too many things inside.

To simplify it, consider a frontal shot, or even a shot of her back, with the flowers just peeking over her shoulders.

HTCahHTC · 17th August 2008

LOL.
sorry.
the white tone.
yeah.

stormweaver · 18th August 2008

agreed with most of them, very cluttered background.

try to take from the back of the girl, to have a more obvious " wait "? hm.. well seeing the rest go away... leaving her looking at them actually... hm.. well i duno if it works anot. just my tots.

well Catatac whats with the ..snapshot thingy going on in ur posts? hahaa

jkuean · 4th September 2008

Hey thanks all for all the feedback!

So from what i gathered, the pictures is basically too cluttered and too messy and to portray my theme better i should have done a frontal or a back shot with just the flowers peeking over the shoulders...
Correct right?

Yup these 2 pts i would certainty take note next time before i shoot next time... but just asking ar, being a snapshot, i thought i sort of captured the moment... No?
Anyway yes i noe that there are better ways to go about doing it and would try next time i approach a similar situation...

Once again thanks all for the feedback!

screamedinfidelities · 4th September 2008

Yeah.Very messy. Seems to have no subject.

Nevermind,We all learn.

jkuean · 4th September 2008

Originally Posted by screamedinfidelities

Yeah.Very messy. Seems to have no subject.

Nevermind,We all learn.

I thought that since the girl is in white it should be obivous that she is the subject?

Jeronleow · 4th September 2008

A bokeh of her with blurred people leaving the hall taken from her front lower left would make it better I feel. Make sure she is staring to the front and far away makes it looks like she is longing for someone. My opinion oni la.

Renesix · 11th September 2008

A good sketch speaks a thousand words.
Your captions makes no sense while your picture is so messy.

There's is no photography elements inside, instead i find it like a ... picture, a scene, a record.

Sorry i felt quite agitated after looking at ur picture.

That's my opinion, what do you think?

Lekech · 12th September 2008

Looking at the pic, I cannot relate to your caption (although I think I get your intention). Your candid snap kinda missed the essence to the lead subject - the eyeball - which is so important to portray emotion/feeling... hence, it fails to bring out the "where are you my love" feel...

Somehow, I also got very distracted by the exit sign at the TLH corner...

IMHO ya...

16th August 2008	#1
jkuean Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Posts: 156	Where are you my love? Well thats the phase which immediately came to my mind when i saw this scene... Its a candid shot after a concert.. i was backstage covering the event, then as everybody was leaving going home, my friend just stood there as everyone else is going home... It felt for me as like shes waiting for her better half to appear, even though its getting late, almost everyone has left, if he is coming, he would have came by then.. But nonetheless, she is still patiently waiting for him to appear... Btw this is wad i felt the pic was to me... Dunno wheather if my fren is already attached... I want to ask if the compostion is okay? And about the pp done.. how is the b/w conversion.. should i made the picture softer... like reducing the contrast.. or is it okay? All C&c is greatly welcomed! Thanks in advance... __________________ D80,18-135mm kit, 85 mm f1.8, sb900. My Flicker : http://www.flickr.com/photos/27466187@N06/sets/ Last edited by jkuean; 16th August 2008 at 06:36 PM.

17th August 2008	#2
Drckz Member Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: SG Posts: 219	Re: Where are you my love? hi, jst wanna say the compostion is out, maybe try centralize the subject? you brought her out well.. the colors are ok. __________________ D R C K G R A P H I E . WERKINPIXTUREMOTION .

17th August 2008	#3
tkbonz Member Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Jurong West Posts: 876	Re: Where are you my love? I can't tell from the composition where the theme comes in...until i read your description. It looks messy...i don't know where is the subject initially and the background (ppl in black walking around) is rather distracting. Things i can tell from the pic: this is a symphonic band concert...it has just ended...you used flash. This shot is too candid and IMHO a shot that i'll try not to take. You can try taking from the back or position yourself in such a way to make your subject and the theme more obvious. How? 1. Use depth of field to isolate your subject 2. Change your perspective...dun take from where you are 3. Or simply finding other subject...too much distractions around. __________________ Dun blame the camera...blame the one behind the viewfinder :bsmilie: My Flickr..pls leave comments!

17th August 2008	#4
night86mare Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: in your mind Posts: 19,302	Re: Where are you my love? very , very cluttered. conversion to black and white is probably a good choice, i.e. it is marginally better than the color version. but it is still very, very cluttered. __________________ Gallery \| Dreamscapes 09 Pentaxian 伪君子之所以更可憎

17th August 2008	#5
HTCahHTC Member Join Date: May 2008 Posts: 820	Re: Where are you my love? nope, composition ain't okay to me. the whole picture seems too messy, but the colors were brought out well.

17th August 2008	#7
ahbian Member Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 1,637	Re: Where are you my love? Too many things inside. To simplify it, consider a frontal shot, or even a shot of her back, with the flowers just peeking over her shoulders. __________________ myflickr

17th August 2008	#8
HTCahHTC Member Join Date: May 2008 Posts: 820	Re: Where are you my love? LOL. sorry. the white tone. yeah.

18th August 2008	#9
stormweaver Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: cck Posts: 129	Re: Where are you my love? agreed with most of them, very cluttered background. try to take from the back of the girl, to have a more obvious " wait "? hm.. well seeing the rest go away... leaving her looking at them actually... hm.. well i duno if it works anot. just my tots. well Catatac whats with the ..snapshot thingy going on in ur posts? hahaa

4th September 2008	#10
jkuean Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Posts: 156	Re: Where are you my love? Hey thanks all for all the feedback! So from what i gathered, the pictures is basically too cluttered and too messy and to portray my theme better i should have done a frontal or a back shot with just the flowers peeking over the shoulders... Correct right? Yup these 2 pts i would certainty take note next time before i shoot next time... but just asking ar, being a snapshot, i thought i sort of captured the moment... No? Anyway yes i noe that there are better ways to go about doing it and would try next time i approach a similar situation... Once again thanks all for the feedback! __________________ D80,18-135mm kit, 85 mm f1.8, sb900. My Flicker : http://www.flickr.com/photos/27466187@N06/sets/

4th September 2008	#11
screamedinfidelities Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Woodlands Posts: 107	Re: Where are you my love? Yeah.Very messy. Seems to have no subject. Nevermind,We all learn. __________________ I stutter behind my shutter

4th September 2008	#13
Jeronleow Member Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Bukit Batok Posts: 63	Re: Where are you my love? A bokeh of her with blurred people leaving the hall taken from her front lower left would make it better I feel. Make sure she is staring to the front and far away makes it looks like she is longing for someone. My opinion oni la. __________________ Canon EOS 40D, EF-S 17-85mm F4-5.6 IS USM, pending BG-E2N grip and Speedlite 580EX-II flash

11th September 2008	#14
Renesix Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Bishan Posts: 57	Re: Where are you my love? A good sketch speaks a thousand words. Your captions makes no sense while your picture is so messy. There's is no photography elements inside, instead i find it like a ... picture, a scene, a record. Sorry i felt quite agitated after looking at ur picture. That's my opinion, what do you think?

12th September 2008	#15
Lekech Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 90	Re: Where are you my love? Looking at the pic, I cannot relate to your caption (although I think I get your intention). Your candid snap kinda missed the essence to the lead subject - the eyeball - which is so important to portray emotion/feeling... hence, it fails to bring out the "where are you my love" feel... Somehow, I also got very distracted by the exit sign at the TLH corner... IMHO ya...