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Old 25th May 2008   #1
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Default Things i see..



Taking a walk along Sungei Api Api in Pasir Ris with my camera, i shot this boat tied to a mangrove tree..

it was about last afternoon and the river was calm (though muddy as usual)

I just bought a pre-owned Canon 400D (Jap specs aka XTi) with kit lens..
looking around for pre-owned wide angle and portrait lens to kickstart my new hobby.

Image was changed in picnik..i think it works better in b/w..

Thanks for all your time..

Dave.

Cheers!

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Old 25th May 2008   #2
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It just feels very cluttered and with the leaves covering the boat, it takes the attention away from your main subject. I do see an interesting bit though. If you could just position yourself to take the boat against the reflection of the HDB flats..... that would be something worth trying.
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Old 26th May 2008   #3
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to me, i think that the reflection shouldn't have the streetlamp and the hdb flat. it would give it a more rustic kind of feel. i like the more rustic kind of feel (:
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Old 26th May 2008   #4
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thanks for the comments..always learning
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Old 26th May 2008   #5
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Works very well for me. The street lamp and HDB reflections adds contrast to the cam nature shot. Ain't good with words so it's gonna b hard for me to explain, but I like it!
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My attention was attract to the reflection of the HDB rather then the boat when i 1st look at the photo.. haha... anw, nice try!
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i prefer the theme of being tethered being more strongly shown in the pic.
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Old 27th May 2008   #8
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I was looking for the tethering, but the foliage and the boat are more readily obvious than the rope. Agree with flipfreak that the whole theme and concept of tethering could be more strongly brought across, especially if you're gonna title your shot like that.
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Old 27th May 2008   #9
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maybe i should re-title it then??
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Old 27th May 2008   #10
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maybe i should re-title it then??
Title aside, what you intend to portray is not strongly shown. There are just too many elements within the frame that are fighting for attention, instead of them all working together to bring one message across. Get my drift?
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Old 28th May 2008   #11
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Noted
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Old 28th May 2008   #12
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Maybe can shift a bit to the right and try to frame the boat with the trees and leaves?
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Old 2nd June 2008   #13
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Father and Son..

how can i do better?

This is at Lumut Beach, we drove up in a convoy.
We were just exploring the resort and i see them playing at the water's edge.
I hope to portray their closeness and the bond they are enjoying.

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Father and Son..

how can i do better?
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