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Old 22nd May 2008   #1
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Hi guys,

This is a continuation to my other thread, Frustration, which can be found here:
http://www.clubsnap.com/forums/showthread.php?t=378254

After all the comments, saying that the guy didnt look frustrated at all and stuff, I had another go at it, and here's the improved version.



Do give me your honest feedbacks/opinions on the mood of the photo, the expression of the student and if the overall picture does portray frustration. thanks alot
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Old 23rd May 2008   #2
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i dunno if it's just me.. but i still find it more of "elation" rather than "frustration"..

lol..
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Old 23rd May 2008   #3
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same sentiments..maybe if he was hunching down, clutching some crushed paper and frowning fiercely that would be more convincing, this seems like a celebration at least to me if i am the students, no more exams loh!

the overblown highlight dont work here for me, personally.
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Old 23rd May 2008   #4
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it looked more like.. "vent" or "venting" to me.
all the throwing of the papers a significance of the pent up frustration that the person has.

are you trying to capture the person's expression or the disarrays of papers and furniture?

also, the overblown highlights didn't work for me here either.
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to me, it looks abit like he just woke up doing some stretching...
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Old 23rd May 2008   #6
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Hi,

To show emotion, I suggest showing more of the facial expression. Of cos, it is not the only way...just a easier and common method that I have observed commonly used by lots of commercial/gallery photos. For your picture, maybe quite a few here mistaken it for other things because the subject face is so small as contrast with the rest of the objects in the picture, plus it is partly hidden by all the shadows.
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Old 23rd May 2008   #7
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Suggest the model tear up a textbook to show extreme frustration.
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Old 23rd May 2008   #8
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I love the pic, particularly the careful attention paid to the background, something that is vial to the mood of this shot. That being said, I do agree that a little more facial expression would help draw the viewer's attention to your model. Having him furiously look at the camera with his mouth open screaming for example could help. Many people under estimate the power that eye contact, particularly during emotive expression, between the model and viewer can have.

I still love the picture, but try something like this and you may have a completely electrifying shot on your hands! Nice job!
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Old 23rd May 2008   #9
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at first glance, in 2 sec, it seems it was like exam has just ended.
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Old 23rd May 2008   #10
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how about the paper flying abt and the model pulling his hair instead of raising his arms? would it be better? focus more on the expression...
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not quite frustrated, the vibe here is still release, elation

probably like how i'd feel next thu

but title and emotions aside, i quite like the picture by itself, just that the big ghostly thing in the immediate front of the picture relative to the camera is ghastly and spoils it somewhat, and i would love to see this picture taken from a wider view, wtih more space with inclusion of the ceiling. but the latter comment is probably stemming from a personal preference.
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Old 6th June 2008   #12
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it's like "YAY EXAMS ARE OVER BABY"
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Old 6th June 2008   #13
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sorry bro, he doesn't look very frustrated to me.
perhaps is the facial expression.... not very suitable for the theme.
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Old 6th June 2008   #14
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From what i've read on other's comments on ur pic...I bet u must be frustrated. I can see u have placed a lot of effort in staging the background and scene. I bet u must be frustrated now.. I think if u take a pic of ur face now...it'll be a more successful pic showing frustration.. hehehe....dun mind me saying that...
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Old 6th June 2008   #15
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I like the concept and idea, but he really looks like he juz finished the semester and is really happy bout it.
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I like the concept and idea, but he really looks like he juz finished the semester and is really happy bout it.
yeah yeah. i agree. if only his facial expression was different? he don't look frustrated to me...
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Old 8th June 2008   #17
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honestly he looks kinda relieved
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