My first model shoot at Imaging Expo Spore

[F2point8]

I was at Imaging Expo Spore this afternoon.
Chanced upon this gorgeous angmo model shoot opportunity. Here is my first experience in model shoot. C&C please. Photo taken with EF70-200 f4L at 200mm, ISO 400.
Thanks.

[Clement Low]

I like it. Looks sensous.

[sprintist]

you need eye contact to improve the picture otherwise it will seem like candid especially with her looking away like that without a full/half body.

the back of her head seems to have some unwanted mess of shadow, might need to dodge or clone it away.

picture don't look sharp enough to me leh

lastly the colour balance, too much yellow

[F2point8]

Originally Posted by sprintist you need eye contact to improve the picture otherwise it will seem like candid especially with her looking away like that without a full/half body. the back of her head seems to have some unwanted mess of shadow, might need to dodge or clone it away. picture don't look sharp enough to me leh lastly the colour balance, too much yellow

Thanks.
Model does not just pose for me as there were many photographers there so...
On sharpness, I think it is ok on the big photo but when I saved it for web, it loses some sharpness somehow .
Agree, it is a little too yellowish to me too.Must be the white balance thing - I set it to AWB.

Cheers and thanks for your comments.

[F2point8]

Originally Posted by Clement Low I like it. Looks sensous.

Thanks Clement.
She is really gorgeous, you must see her in person!

[tribal.snake]

nice picture.
only thing i would like to see is the other shoulder u cut away.
with the eyes looking away, think is fine. gives a different feel to it.
ya and watch the wb.

[F2point8]

Originally Posted by tribal.snake nice picture. only thing i would like to see is the other shoulder u cut away. with the eyes looking away, think is fine. gives a different feel to it. ya and watch the wb.

Noted. About the shoulder, I was trying to frame her to fill the frame so something has to give way.
Thanks .