Lonely

barracuda · 25th April 2007

1.in what area is critique to be sought?

a) I would like to know your first thought when you see this pic
b) composition
c) post-processing

2.what one hopes to achieve with the piece of work?

I wanted to capture the quietness and peacefulness of the environment, and the loneliness, yet strongness of the broken chair standing.

3.under what circumstance is the picture taken? (physical conditions/emotions)

This was taken in a building that was abandoned almost a decade ago. In a very dark room, stood this lone broken chair, and a stray of sunlight shone on it, accenturating its existence, after being abandoned for years.

4.what the critique seeker personally thinks of the picture

Somehow I feel the post-processing is not very good. In addition, I think a subtle change of the position of the light may make wonders to this shot.

foxtwo · 26th April 2007

Looks pretty ordinary, I think composition could have been more creative. The idea's been shot to the moon and back, it's gonna be something special if you wanna make an impact.

I kinda understand the appeal of your composition, it is quite unusual to see a horizontal beam of light across the bottom third of the frame but please remove or make your copyright smaller and to the bottom right. It's like the composition was made for the copyright in mind, so it's really a waste to a novel idea. You really do need the empty space to complete the picture, as much black as you can.

If you've shot at a level angle you could have portrayed the chair in a single plane. Make it 2D, since your lighting already suggests it. And it would also make it that something special.

Just a slight distraction would be the tile lines in the background. Remove them entirely post production.

I feel you were in a unique situation to be creative, but you were/are still conservative (evident from your writeup). Explore more.

ps. Regardless, it makes a fine candidate for the 'lonely chair' series. Go bump the thread!

LENS · 26th April 2007

try to turn the chair and facing you? it makes the object more eye-catching =)

barracuda · 26th April 2007

Originally Posted by foxtwo

Looks pretty ordinary, I think composition could have been more creative. The idea's been shot to the moon and back, it's gonna be something special if you wanna make an impact.

Originally Posted by foxtwo

I feel you were in a unique situation to be creative, but you were/are still conservative (evident from your writeup). Explore more.

Thank you for your honest comments. This really helps to explain a lot of other things.

nigel84 · 26th April 2007

Originally Posted by LENS

try to turn the chair and facing you? it makes the object more eye-catching =)

That would work, or try positioning yourself with the light coming in from the side of the chair, that would capture more details then the current one. That would also make the lines of shadow from the chair lead to the fading brick lines in ur background. Well just my 2 cents worth...

barracuda · 28th April 2007

LENS, nigel84,

Thanks for your comments.

25th April 2007	#1
barracuda Member Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: Singapore Posts: 618	Lonely 1.in what area is critique to be sought? a) I would like to know your first thought when you see this pic b) composition c) post-processing 2.what one hopes to achieve with the piece of work? I wanted to capture the quietness and peacefulness of the environment, and the loneliness, yet strongness of the broken chair standing. 3.under what circumstance is the picture taken? (physical conditions/emotions) This was taken in a building that was abandoned almost a decade ago. In a very dark room, stood this lone broken chair, and a stray of sunlight shone on it, accenturating its existence, after being abandoned for years. 4.what the critique seeker personally thinks of the picture Somehow I feel the post-processing is not very good. In addition, I think a subtle change of the position of the light may make wonders to this shot. Last edited by barracuda; 26th April 2007 at 06:39 AM.

26th April 2007	#2
foxtwo Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: singapore Posts: 1,707	Re: Lonely Looks pretty ordinary, I think composition could have been more creative. The idea's been shot to the moon and back, it's gonna be something special if you wanna make an impact. I kinda understand the appeal of your composition, it is quite unusual to see a horizontal beam of light across the bottom third of the frame but please remove or make your copyright smaller and to the bottom right. It's like the composition was made for the copyright in mind, so it's really a waste to a novel idea. You really do need the empty space to complete the picture, as much black as you can. If you've shot at a level angle you could have portrayed the chair in a single plane. Make it 2D, since your lighting already suggests it. And it would also make it that something special. Just a slight distraction would be the tile lines in the background. Remove them entirely post production. I feel you were in a unique situation to be creative, but you were/are still conservative (evident from your writeup). Explore more. ps. Regardless, it makes a fine candidate for the 'lonely chair' series. Go bump the thread!

26th April 2007	#3
LENS Member Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 758	Re: Lonely try to turn the chair and facing you? it makes the object more eye-catching =)

28th April 2007	#6
barracuda Member Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: Singapore Posts: 618	Re: Lonely LENS, nigel84, Thanks for your comments.