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Old 22nd April 2007   #1
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Default the fallen one or ones?



i took this picture to show the mood of the fallen ones during the WW2.
i want to show the sadness of the dead ones who were nvr found, MIA, KIA...
would like comments on the concept and the idea of showing the mood and if it works
slight colour enhancement

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Old 22nd April 2007   #2
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Default Re: the fallen one or ones?

it's a nice shot =) well thought of and executed. the idea is there, so u have to play around wif it. try working on the contrast, or maybe consider b&w.
maybe u could even change the angle slightly to include even more tombstones down the row to make it seem 'endless'
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Old 23rd April 2007   #3
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Default Re: the fallen one or ones?

the foreground has excessive grass and the flower chosen is kinda pointless.

but love the background, got a lomo feel to it.
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Old 23rd April 2007   #4
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Default Re: the fallen one or ones?

i love ur pic. i've done some editing i hope u dun mind



i cropped it a little and added more colours
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Old 23rd April 2007   #5
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Default Re: the fallen one or ones?

Hmmm... Inzaki's edited pic though looks more contrasty... lost the "sadness" appeal to the pic.. imo... i think noob117 could try to convert to b&w .. to go for both contrast and the mood that you wanted it.
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Old 23rd April 2007   #6
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Default Re: the fallen one or ones?

Originally Posted by nysheng View Post
it's a nice shot =) well thought of and executed. the idea is there, so u have to play around wif it. try working on the contrast, or maybe consider b&w.
maybe u could even change the angle slightly to include even more tombstones down the row to make it seem 'endless'
wow that sounds good.. i love the part bout making it endless.
mabi move the flower easlier hahahaha
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Old 23rd April 2007   #7
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Originally Posted by inzaki View Post
i love ur pic. i've done some editing i hope u dun mind



i cropped it a little and added more colours
the crop looks great.
but i thing the contrast you over did it abit.
juz like jee said i think BW works better
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Old 23rd April 2007   #8
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Default Re: the fallen one or ones?

i feel that the flower chosen should have been white in colour
yellow is too bright and happy.

also you might want to consider moving the flower closer to the tombstones
and go super WA with this shot
maybe a from the top-down angled POV whould be better
(the flower seems too far away from the tombstones to have much connection)

sadness? maybe some gloomy storm clouds and water droplet would also enhance your idea.
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Old 23rd April 2007   #9
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i totally agree with you guys...try to convert to bnw but watch out for lost of details as ur original picture is a bit too dull.

cheers!
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Old 24th April 2007   #10
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I like the composition. Hope you don't mind I play a little bit with the colors in PS to have that gloomy feeling. Hope it works.
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Old 24th April 2007   #11
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I like the composition. Hope you don't mind I play a little bit with the colors in PS to have that gloomy feeling. Hope it works.
nah i dun mind...
but i think full BW works best.

juz like ortega said the yellow is bright n happy
so i guess it does not work tt well.
but i would like to know how to make the BG sepia(?) but the flower remains in colour?

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Old 24th April 2007   #12
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Default Re: the fallen one or ones?

The problem if you convert this to B&W is that the flower will turn Gray. And it does not appeal anymore. So I keep the color of the flower and add a sepia tone as a background.

I did it by using layers in photoshop.
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