Quick Critique?

velasco · 10th November 2006

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/42810654/

is this shot okay?
i hope its not too dark for anybody's liking.
i wanna give that dark feel.

thanks

Del_CtrlnoAlt · 11th November 2006

dun appeal to me... too many issues to list... when my headache subside i'll write in details...

Del_CtrlnoAlt · 11th November 2006

hmm slightly better headache...

anyway... just somethings u could work on...

draw a grid when you crop, your apple is not in the centre, and even if you say its not suppose to be, its neither here nor there, its like 1/xxx off center... its not 2/3 or 1/3... very very distracting...

light as well, too much black area, esp at the bottom, making your picture top loaded but bottom empty. try to either improve in composition, or improve lighting.

its better to throw some light from the bottom of the pic, as in u shoot top view, some light from your side. can use a reflector... else no contrast of the apple, and the shadow consumed the side of the apple

the water droplets are nice, but not contrasty enuff, esp those on the sides, without any light source, and look like the apple mutated with some protrusion... check top of the apple.

the stem look very flat, i'll either rotate the apple to have the stem pointing up or just cut the stem shorter.

lastly, there is alot of white spot in the picture... most probably you have used a magic brush or something and did not do a good job... or your sensor about to go...

eikin · 11th November 2006

actually i think the water droplets are excessive ... and black and white will work better.

Del_CtrlnoAlt · 11th November 2006

Originally Posted by eikin

actually i think the water droplets are excessive ... and black and white will work better.

think this pic b&w, no hope liao... too dark, unless +1.5 exp

Cheesecake · 11th November 2006

critique?

yeaps, moved to the critique corner. u'll get more responses and replies here.

10th November 2006	#1
velasco Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: PARISris , Singapore Posts: 2,266	Quick Critique? http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/42810654/ is this shot okay? i hope its not too dark for anybody's liking. i wanna give that dark feel. thanks __________________ 01.02. -on the verge of losing my sanity.

11th November 2006	#2
Del_CtrlnoAlt Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: Outside the Dry Box. Posts: 16,342	Re: Quick Critique? dun appeal to me... too many issues to list... when my headache subside i'll write in details... __________________ Logging Off Permanently. Those who need to contact me will know where to contact me.

11th November 2006	#3
Del_CtrlnoAlt Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: Outside the Dry Box. Posts: 16,342	Re: Quick Critique? hmm slightly better headache... anyway... just somethings u could work on... draw a grid when you crop, your apple is not in the centre, and even if you say its not suppose to be, its neither here nor there, its like 1/xxx off center... its not 2/3 or 1/3... very very distracting... light as well, too much black area, esp at the bottom, making your picture top loaded but bottom empty. try to either improve in composition, or improve lighting. its better to throw some light from the bottom of the pic, as in u shoot top view, some light from your side. can use a reflector... else no contrast of the apple, and the shadow consumed the side of the apple the water droplets are nice, but not contrasty enuff, esp those on the sides, without any light source, and look like the apple mutated with some protrusion... check top of the apple. the stem look very flat, i'll either rotate the apple to have the stem pointing up or just cut the stem shorter. lastly, there is alot of white spot in the picture... most probably you have used a magic brush or something and did not do a good job... or your sensor about to go... __________________ Logging Off Permanently. Those who need to contact me will know where to contact me.

11th November 2006	#4
eikin Moderator Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: 東京 Tokyo Posts: 10,920	Re: Quick Critique? actually i think the water droplets are excessive ... and black and white will work better. __________________ APAD

11th November 2006	#6
Cheesecake Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: I live in a haunted house!!!!! Posts: 12,820	Re: Quick Critique? critique? yeaps, moved to the critique corner. u'll get more responses and replies here. __________________ You'll Never Walk Alone! 初恋的感觉杀很大!