what do you think of this picture?

elfvin · 12th November 2005

how do i improve on a stationary object?

+evenstar · 12th November 2005

The first unsightly thing that catches my eye is the object at the top left corner, followed by the dirty sunglasses lenses and the space at the top right corner

Stoned · 12th November 2005

I think your concept is interesting, but something is not quite right so it doesn't strike me.

I can't put my thumb on it exactly but try a cleaner background for starters. There also needs to be more shadow detail I feel.

I don't know if you intended it but the opposing triangles at the top right and bottom left are interesting but don't stand out enough. Try 1 white triangle 1 black? Or maybe black BG white triangles.

Darn! I hate it when I don't know why I don't like it. Try reshooting with this concept though(the light coming through the sunglass lens). Oh invert the sunglass too maybe?

Big Kahuna · 12th November 2005

At first I tot it was a bra...but can't find the Triumph logo but spoted the big "O" instead

LordAeRo · 12th November 2005

Cool, I got confused on where the specs lens was (due to the shadow merging quite well with the real rim) initially. Haha.

eikin · 13th November 2005

the lighting concept is quite good. just need to clean up the frame of unnecessary distractions.

elfvin · 13th November 2005

sorry, but i'm just a noob in photography! or just snapping photos. and in this forum. heh.

Originally Posted by +evenstar

The first unsightly thing that catches my eye is the object at the top left corner, followed by the dirty sunglasses lenses and the space at the top right corner

ok, thats alot of critique.

i will seriously re-take without those terrible stuff.

Originally Posted by Stoned

I think your concept is interesting, but something is not quite right so it doesn't strike me.

I can't put my thumb on it exactly but try a cleaner background for starters. There also needs to be more shadow detail I feel.

I don't know if you intended it but the opposing triangles at the top right and bottom left are interesting but don't stand out enough. Try 1 white triangle 1 black? Or maybe black BG white triangles.

Darn! I hate it when I don't know why I don't like it. Try reshooting with this concept though(the light coming through the sunglass lens). Oh invert the sunglass too maybe?

thanks alot for the advise. will do a better one. pardon me if the picture is disturbing to you.. haha..

Witness · 13th November 2005

imho, idea is good....angle is bad...

cheers..

elfvin · 13th November 2005

i'll wait for the next wave of strong sunlight that hits my house and retake with much better angle and of course less distraction. haha.

thanks for all critiques and advise.

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Stoned Senior Member Join Date: May 2004 Location: Changi Posts: 4,376	Re: what do you think of this picture? I think your concept is interesting, but something is not quite right so it doesn't strike me. I can't put my thumb on it exactly but try a cleaner background for starters. There also needs to be more shadow detail I feel. I don't know if you intended it but the opposing triangles at the top right and bottom left are interesting but don't stand out enough. Try 1 white triangle 1 black? Or maybe black BG white triangles. Darn! I hate it when I don't know why I don't like it. Try reshooting with this concept though(the light coming through the sunglass lens). Oh invert the sunglass too maybe? __________________ My Personal Folio (of random events and things)

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