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Old 17th July 2005   #1
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in this photo i attempted to capture an impression of the scale of the Kyoto JR Station, the buzz of commuter traffic, and its modern-style design which has attracted its fair share of supporters and detractors for its bold contrast to the traditional image of Kyoto.

i took a series of shots with black and white in mind, and this was the one that i liked most. apart from using channel mixer to convert the colour photo to b/w, resizing and usm, no further adjustments were done.

please view the larger image for better detail, it was a little too big (683x1024) to post directly as according to the CC guidelines.



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Old 17th July 2005   #2
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consider dramatising the space by going lower (so that you include even more of the spatial truss above) or wider. i see space as the subject in the picture rather than the people and activities, make the people smaller in proportion, they are there to enhance the visual scale of the space.

i also felt that the picture is rather dark (not underexpose, just dark)
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Originally Posted by varf
in this photo i attempted to capture an impression of the scale of the Kyoto JR Station, the buzz of commuter traffic, and its modern-style design which has attracted its fair share of supporters and detractors for its bold contrast to the traditional image of Kyoto.


I like this kind of photo, although I don't see the modern design in it - metal struts remind me more of the late 19th/early 20th century industrial age, so to me the picture has more of a nostalgic atmosphere.

One thing I noticed is that three prominently placed people in the foreground seem to be looking in the same direction, as if there is something interesting to see. I wonder what it may be, as if part of the story is missing, and this uncertainty distracts me a bit from the architecture.
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Old 19th July 2005   #4
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thanks for the comments guys, interesting points to ponder!

eikin: i hadn't thought about including so much more space, will consider that in future. good tip! as for the picture being dark, i'll try to play around with the curves and see if some lightening will help.

LittleWolf: i'm not too sure what the three people were looking at either, but there is an escalator heading downwards to the basement in that direction. i guess the glass part of the glass-and-steel design doesn't really show up in this image.
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