haney ver.1

shahrecover · 14th July 2005

hi all! this is my very first studio shoot. pls leave critics/comments. thank you.

saifulbahar · 14th July 2005

Lighting is ok, nice looking model but she's a little too stiff... I would rather not have the shadow drop at the back... good work... keep it up...

shahrecover · 14th July 2005

Originally Posted by saifulbahar

Lighting is ok, nice looking model but she's a little too stiff... I would rather not have the shadow drop at the back... good work... keep it up...

thanks. yeah, i think the shadow is distracting too..

ortega · 14th July 2005

i feel that a reflector on the left would soften the shadows
and get rid of the watch.

also talk to the sitter and make her feel at ease b4 the real shoot begins.

hazekang · 15th July 2005

eh no experience with portrait shoots...

but i felt the veins or watever on the arm with the watch abit disturbing...

mayb if no watch there i might not have noticed the viens though...

eikin · 15th July 2005

i hardly do portraits, but IMHO you should either go wider so that the left hand doesn't get 'chopped' awkwardly or crop tighter so that both arms form the frame. i would prefer a much tighter crop given her pleasant facial expression. i would also consider putting her in a different light (pun intended) right now the lighting looks rather flat, doesn't bring out the lighter mood in her ...

yes, could be due to the shadow on her right

Splutter · 15th July 2005

I'm ok with the compo, although its not really great. I think the shadow and the watch are pretty distracting. Like ortega said, you have to communicate with the model to get more natural results.

Berries · 15th July 2005

I feel tat if the model tilt her head at a slight angle would be better...

I suggest u brighten e pix using ps..

shahrecover · 15th July 2005

Thanks all for your wonderful comments! helps alot!

14th July 2005	#1
shahrecover Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: woodlands Posts: 245	haney ver.1 hi all! this is my very first studio shoot. pls leave critics/comments. thank you. Last edited by shahrecover; 14th July 2005 at 11:00 PM. Reason: no image

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saifulbahar Member Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Singapore Posts: 858	Lighting is ok, nice looking model but she's a little too stiff... I would rather not have the shadow drop at the back... good work... keep it up... __________________ Saiful Bahar - "I don't care what equipment you use... but what you produce"

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ortega Moderator Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: NorthEast Posts: 16,507	i feel that a reflector on the left would soften the shadows and get rid of the watch. also talk to the sitter and make her feel at ease b4 the real shoot begins. __________________ The Law

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eikin Moderator Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: 東京 Tokyo Posts: 10,920	i hardly do portraits, but IMHO you should either go wider so that the left hand doesn't get 'chopped' awkwardly or crop tighter so that both arms form the frame. i would prefer a much tighter crop given her pleasant facial expression. i would also consider putting her in a different light (pun intended) right now the lighting looks rather flat, doesn't bring out the lighter mood in her ... yes, could be due to the shadow on her right __________________ APAD

15th July 2005	#7
Splutter Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: Gim Boon Tai Posts: 2,819	I'm ok with the compo, although its not really great. I think the shadow and the watch are pretty distracting. Like ortega said, you have to communicate with the model to get more natural results. __________________ If you understand my works, it's photography. If you don't, it's art. SplutterPhotography\|flickr

15th July 2005	#5
hazekang Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Clementi Posts: 2,394	eh no experience with portrait shoots... but i felt the veins or watever on the arm with the watch abit disturbing... mayb if no watch there i might not have noticed the viens though...

15th July 2005	#8
Berries New Member Join Date: May 2005 Location: North Posts: 34	I feel tat if the model tilt her head at a slight angle would be better... I suggest u brighten e pix using ps..